Northern Chill wrote:A very hot and spicy chapter to this deepening serial. Some specific thoughts:
2) A general thought: I really think thrallium is getting overused as a plot device in all Metrobay based stories. I know it looks great in art and is very handy for the mind control element but seeing it crop up in nearly every tale reminds me a bit of Superman writers overindulging in bringing kryptonite into comic stories of the 60's and 70's. Personally, either expand what thrallium can do beyond MC (physical tf , side effects, instability in large quantities) or dial back the usage a bit, imo.
Hmmm. Story plot comes to mind: bad guys get complacent with thrallium. New heroine comes to town. She's immune to it (probably not human...alien maybe?).
Every bad guy suddenly has a new arch-nemesis they are utterly terrified of. Mad scientists and magic users gain new respect.