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Tecknophyle wrote:Pretty decent ending: it was predictable how it would work out (anyone who didn't see it coming has got to be incredibly genre-blind), but good. Again, the narration is a tad redundant, the worst example being the one where Goldwing is channeling Batman. The dialogue actually does it far better, and far more succinctly, than the (to be honest) long-winded bit at the bottom. My opinion is that you write characterization and such far better through dialogue than what appears in the captions. That comes across as stiff and almost forced, while the dialogue flows far more naturally. Note that you didn't use it in the last two images, allowing the art to tell you everything you needed to know.
One thing I did find a bit off was that Enchantress clearly stated she remembered what she and Spellweaver had went through when they were enslaved by Mesmerella, but there was no mention at wanting to track her down. Yes, she was concerned about finding Spellweaver, but as far as they know the original villain is still out there.
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