by leto17 » December 12th, 2009, 3:18 pm
In all honesty, I doubt that this work will ever be produced. That's okay, though, as people have really come up with some great requests like mctek, especially as he is a most talented artist in his own right. Nevertheless, here is the revised work.
Here's to hoping, if nothing else to seeing Noctrissa in the recent member's request story again when it gets put back up
Hello. Here is the revision. 28 pages including the 2 cover pages, which could be reduced to 1 if you choose, in which case it would be 27.
Again, feel free to revise it dramatically as you see fit.
Characters: Gothikka, Noctrissa, Knyght Fighter, She Freak, Max Indexs, Fembot Bambi, GoldWing, and Syman Sayz (brief cameos for the last six).
Cover Page 1: Up to you, honestly. Overhead full frontal shot. I came up with Knyght Fighter in her uniform, minus her cape, holding her helmet in front of her while lying in a coffin. Her eyes are open and staring, emitting a green light. Gothikka is standing by her, running her hand along her cheek, looking upward at the camnera with a smile. She Freak is strapped to a table nearby, much like she was in Halloween Havoc, with Noctrissa standing by with a smile, ready to flip a switch.
The Adventures of Mistress Gothikka: The Juice is the Life! (feel free to change this title if its too corny).
Panel 1-3: We are told and shown how Max's star has temporally hit rock-bottom before the implementation of the highly successful Greentooth Earpiece strategem. Although this fall appears to have culminated in the aftermath of the HER/Sentius debacle when he lost control of She Freak and Gothikka was reanimated, it all seemed to begin with his and the Wellington family's embarrassment at the hands of Knyght Fighter.
Panel 1: After a hard day of work, he decides to go to the strip joint where Syndee works while accompanied by Fembot Bambi, while leaving work in the hands of Ginger. When he arrives, however, the place is oddly quiet and in a shambles. Goons are knocked out everywhere, including Doogan Tinker and Syman Sayz, and suddenly he hears sirens.
Panel 2: Suddenly, Knyght Fighter in her uniform, complete with a helmet, holds a still woozy, semiconscious GoldWing. Knyght Fighter and GoldWing have broken free of control. Knyght Fighter kicks Max in the crotch and gives him a black eye.
Panel 3: Fembot Bambi manages to catch Max as he falls and jumps out the window. Knyght Fighter pursues Max but fails to capture him. However, Syman Sayz is arrested and thrown in jail, as is Doogan Tinker and the rest of the goons.
Panel 4: She Freak is lying in a comfy reclining chair, and Gothikka is lying in her arms, while Noctrissa is lying in her arms, snuggling up to her. They are watching one of Irene Webb's old horror movies on a movie projector in Noctrissa's home, which happens to be the old castle from the Original Sin series, albeit in the process of being renovated. These movies are her one great frivolous pleasure before she was turned into Noctrissa. Kikka likes them as they are from her time and she recognizes the actors. Pick your choice of film as long as its a vampire film. They are plotting how to expand Gothikka's power while enjoying themselves.
Noctrissa, who developed an extensive intelligence network within ROPE under her Webb persona and has continued to maintain it, is urging that Knyght Fighter be their next target. She gives the reasons for this in a series of dialogue bubbles. First, this is that it would increase their prestige within the organization, catching a woman who humiliated Max Indexs, even putting him temporally in the hospital due to "groin injuries." Second, Noctrissa points out that Knyght Fighter is a strong and capable potential adversary, yet somewhat estranged from Superheroine Squad. This makes her vulnerable and a convenient target as it shoudl be ahwile before she is missed. This is especially the case given that after being turned into Syndee, she revealed all information about herself, including her home and hideouts, after being put through the Modification Machine. Dr. Webb learned of this because she shared responsibility with Doogan Tinker for the development of the Modification Machine. Noctrissa has already deleted this information from ROPE's main computer, while retaining possession of it in her personal files. Fourth, Knyght Fighter, as a superheroine, would be ideal for testing a new device Noctrissa developed and which she holds up, a green vibrator, a product inspired by her key advisory work on the Green Earpiece project.
Panel 5: Finally, Noctrissa mentions how nice it would be to have a sensual sister to serve the whim of her Misstress Gothikka. Patting her on the head, Gothikka, staring intently at a scene of a sexy vampire chick on the movie projector, replies "not exactly, my pet, I think we will manufacture something you will enjoy even more than that."
Here we learn a bit about the personality and relationship of the two. Gothikka is clearly in charge and clearly has great power, but Noctrissa is more knowledgeable about ROPE politics. This means that Gothikka often orders Noctrissa to provide her with advice, which Noctrissa provides and Gothikka often takes. It should be mentioned that Gothikka appreciates this, having learned from the error of her ways with the harsh treatment of Feelix that blew up in her face. Gothikka is bad, but she likes to take care of her own and take and share pleasure with them. I'd like for Gothikka and Noctrissa to by sympathetic villians-Gothikka should have gained some wisdom, however, twisted, from what happened to her as Kikka, making her more dangerous.
Panel 6-8: Gothikka confronts and enslaves Knyght Fighter at her hideout.
Panel 6: After a long night of successful crimebusting, Claire St. Cummins is just getting out of the shower and answering the door in a skimpy towel, satisfied with her win and looking forward to a good rest and a friendly visit with GoldWing to see what is up with the Superheroine Squad. When she opens the shower curtain, she is surprised and confronted by Gothikka, She Freak, and Noctrissa.
Panel 7: She Freak holds her up in the air by her throat. Gothikka locks eyes with her and mentally subdues her. Noctrissa thrusts a green vibrator into her. Claire's eyes roll up in her skull, her body goes rigid, and she starts to fall stiffly back, but is caught and held in place by Gothikka. A low, monotone robotic moan of pleasure is continuously issued from Claire's mouth as she cums.
Panel 8: Claire is held standing stiffly in place. Gothikka mentions that she is pleased that the the device works (sadly I can't think of a name for it). Irene mentions that her advisory work on the development of the greentooth earpiece has indeed paid off in spades, giving them an alternative to market their OWN product in competition with the greentooth earpeice developed by Max's side of APEX.
Panel 9: Claire has stopped cumming, standing stiffly, staring straight ahead. Gothikka relays a series of commands to Claire as she idly plays with and feels up her body about how she must obey her commands and serve her. The vibrator rewards her with more intensity, causing gasps of pleasure from Claire as answers in the affirmative.
Panel 10: In Panel 11, Kynight Fighter, in her full uniform, is shown walking robotically outside following Gothikka.
Panel 11: At Gothikka's Castle in her laboratory. Knyght fighter is standing stiffly, nude, staring forward, green vibrator still within her. She Freak has her arms around Gothikka, playing with her body as Gothikka and Noctrissa idly checks out Knyght Fighter's body which responds to their touch with low moans. Gothikka is pleased with "the material for her new product".
Panel 12: Gothikka takes two very small suction tubes and places them in her breasts. She Freak then places the other end of the tubes in the ends of the vibrator. Noctrissa is kneeling before Gothikka and performing cunniligous and masturbating with a silver vibrator.Gothikka then begans to chant a spell, and as she does, her eyes flash red. The narration tells us that the spell is designed to alter the effects of robotifying nanomachines in the vibrator to fit her personal taste and to warp the body and mind of the victim into an appropriate dark counterpart and alter ego.
Panel 13-14: She Freak picks up a completely stiff Knyght Fighter and places her on a table. She then lays down on a table beside Knyght FIghter. Metal clamps lock her in place. A metal rod goes up into her vagina, soothing her as metal suction cups come down and place themselves over her breasts.
Panel 15-16. Knyght Fighter's body begins to change color, turning alabaster pale, with dark eye shadow. Gothikka, Noctrissa, She Freak, and Knyght Fighter moan in intense pleasure. The narration informs us that after several hours, Stage 1 is complete.
Panel 17-18: Another pair of suction cups connected to the ceiling and on the other side of She Freak's Suction cups goes down over Knyght Fighters Breasts and begins to pump, making them larger and introducing She Freaks DNA and genetic material to make Knyght Fighter stronger and more powerful. Once again, all four moan in orgasmic pleasure as After several more hours, Stage 2 is complete.
Panel 19-20: Now Knyght Fighter is shown lying on her back, but with her legs spread. The vibrators have been removed. The breast pumps have been removed. Gothikka lowers her face over Claire's vagina, and sticks a LOOONG tongue in her vagina, while She Freak, wqearing on strap on, mounts Gothikka from behind. Noctrissa takes the green vibrator that was in Knyght Fighter's vagina and places it in her mouth, and Knyght Fighter sucks it as Noctrissa plays with herself. Gothikka mentally casts a spell as she tongues Claire, and when bites very gently but very firmly down on the hood of Claire's clit while slamming her tongue in it, electricity shoots out all along it, and Claire massively cums in a mindblowing orgasm. A Gothic numeral "O" appears across the top of her pussy, and we see fangs grow out of her teeth and Claire's tongue grows. Stage Three is complete.
Panel 21: Knyght Fighter is shown lying on the table. Gothikka speaks to her,giving her commands. Knyght Fighter robotically proclaims her service and then sits stiffly up. Knyght Fighter's eyes open up and the gothic beauty smiles, revealing her fangs. She is now an oral vampire. She says she is the Nibbler. She is hungry. Hungry for pussy.
Panel 22-24: Gothikka, pleased with the performance of her subordinates and her new pet, gives the Nibbler permission to "drink" from Noctrissa's vagina via oral sex, triggering orgasms in both as her mystical little fangs nibble on Noctrissa's clits so she can drink some empowering juice (no blood). The Nibbler then falls asleep with the thoughts of "yummy". She Freak simply stands and allows this to happen, giving a slight coo of pleasure. Noctrissa thanks her mistress as Gothikka pats her on the head as she cums, pleased with the actions of her pet, and also pleased, as revcealed in a thought balloon, that the mind control power of the Nibbler's oral vampirism is not as powerful as Gothikka's own abilities. .
Panel 25: It is almost daylight, and all have had a long night, and thus it is time to sleep. She Freak carries Knyght Fighter to the bedroom, which features a huge canopied four poster bed. Gothikka places the green vibrator back into the sleeping body of Knyght Fighter, giving her the opportunity to enjoy pleasure as her submission to Gothikka is subconciously reinforced. There are a set of standing coffins and sarcophogai facing the bed against one side of the wall facing the bed, the better for Gothikka to gaze upon her conquests as they rest. Gothikka, She Freak, and Noctrissa also retire to the bed. With Noctrissa being carried by Gothikka as she too is tired and almost collapses. Gothikka pats her on the head, gives her a kiss, and gives her a small spell to sleep happy and peacefully. They then settle in bed together, Noctrissa in Gothikka's arms, and Gothikka in She Freak's arms.
Panel 26: Full frontal body shot of Knyght Fighter resting in her coffin with a smile on her face from the perspective of Gothikka lying on the bed. e followingthught bbble: "And tomorrow we place dress-up, which should be fun. Tha costume of yours must go"
Gothikka then says "And tomorrow we play dressup, which should be fun. that stuff old costume of yours simply must go."
Cover Page 2: Again, this cover page seems kind of weak. If you have a better idea, go right ahead. The picture focuses on the Nibbler's face and breasts and as she sleeps in the standing coffin. Gothikka stands on one side and Noctrissa on the other, holding their arms out as if presenting her. She Freak is holding the coffin up with a standing cart.
To be continued appears to the bottom of the page...